Afraid

12 responses to “Afraid”

• Sue Ranscht
  July 9th, 2016 at 1:04 pm

  I like rhythm and energy of the form, though I think past tense weakens the message by giving a false sense of security — a danger gone. Like a wishful future looking back. Did you consider present tense for lines 1, 2, 3, and 7? Might there be more power in it?

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  • Kat Myrman
    July 9th, 2016 at 1:44 pm

    I did actually right after I posted it. Didn’t have time to edit. Your comments are my confirmation to revise it. Thanks! 😊

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    • Sue Ranscht
      July 9th, 2016 at 8:38 pm

      Well done! And proof that no matter what you’ve written, it communicates. 🙂

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      • Kat Myrman
        July 9th, 2016 at 9:12 pm

        Thanks Sue. 😊 I’m living a dream…writing.

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        • Sue Ranscht
          July 9th, 2016 at 9:18 pm

          🙂

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• anotherfoodieblogger
  July 9th, 2016 at 1:22 pm

  Very fitting for today’s political climate.

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• Elusive Trope
  July 9th, 2016 at 4:35 pm

  that sums it splendidly…the body politic depressingly so

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  • Kat Myrman
    July 9th, 2016 at 5:20 pm

    Thank you. I love this challenge. It’s such a good idea.

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• Saturday 7 – Space, Time, and Raspberries
  July 10th, 2016 at 9:59 pm

  […] like mercury colliding: Afraid […]

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• Janice
  July 10th, 2016 at 10:34 pm

  Your refrain and message really works well in the form.

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  • Kat Myrman
    July 10th, 2016 at 11:54 pm

    Thank you Janice. I like this form.

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• Lynz Real Cooking
  July 14th, 2016 at 8:51 am

  Nice one

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