Gone
imagining you gone | as fogs hovers
i still hear your whispers | dripping with dew
your breath | a gentle breeze
warming my neck | infused by fragrance
the brush of your lips | sweetness blossoming
against my skin | spring on the wind
imagining you gone | sun muted by the gray
pierces my heart | remnants of night
rendering me inconsolable | causing the doves to mourn
kat ~ 31 March 2016
As promised, my second rendering of this interesting poetry form…the Cleave Poem. One should be able to read the left column, right column and each line across as a combined thought giving you three distinct poems. An interesting challenge indeed.
To learn more about the Cleave poem or to give it a try yourself, click HERE to Jane Doughertyβs poetry challenge.
March 31st, 2016 at 11:25 am
Very well done!
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:27 am
I like the way you really have got two different ideas interplaying in this one. The effect is dreamlike.
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:31 am
I agree regarding the effect being dreamlike. This one was less troubling to write than the first…and actually was a calming exercise. Perhaps I was wrapped in the words. π Thank you again for introducing us to these lovely poetry forms. π
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:37 am
My pleasure, Kat. It makes me explore poetry forms I’d never heard of before π
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:43 am
Loved the way you present winter and love…great job ..executed very well kat
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:44 am
Thank you. It is a beautiful and interesting poetry form. π
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March 31st, 2016 at 11:46 am
Yes kat, I made my attempts too…one is with Secret keeper’s prompt and other an adittion to my Nine waves series…all thanks to Jane
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March 31st, 2016 at 12:50 pm
Wow! Such a beautifully layered, poetic form and you created a gem. So lovely, Kat.
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March 31st, 2016 at 12:52 pm
Thank you Olga! Once I got into it, it flowed fairly easily.
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March 31st, 2016 at 1:00 pm
I’m inspired to make an attempt! π
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March 31st, 2016 at 1:12 pm
I love this! Wonderful, dreamy poem.
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March 31st, 2016 at 2:53 pm
I agree, dreamy π
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March 31st, 2016 at 7:32 pm
Thanks Kim. I was hoping it would be π
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March 31st, 2016 at 3:01 pm
Very good! An almost ethereal quality to it.
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March 31st, 2016 at 7:28 pm
Thank you Devore. The fog does that to me. π
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March 31st, 2016 at 4:41 pm
Very good!
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March 31st, 2016 at 7:27 pm
Thanks Lynn. A second cleave poem π
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March 31st, 2016 at 7:49 pm
Lovely!
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March 31st, 2016 at 7:55 pm
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March 31st, 2016 at 9:35 pm
Very unique, and I think you did an excellent job on all sides of the poem. π
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March 31st, 2016 at 9:37 pm
Thank you Kathryn. Had never heard of this form before. I really like it. π
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April 1st, 2016 at 6:56 am
This came out really nicely … bravo!
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April 1st, 2016 at 7:34 am
Thank you! I’m hating the hang of it! Really like this form. π (note…my autocorrect revised “getting” into “hating” in my comment here…i use the “H” word quite sparingly so this is quite annoying!)
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April 2nd, 2016 at 4:58 am
I’m not sure about hating the hang of it … but one can see that you’re really into the form!
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April 2nd, 2016 at 6:33 am
Thank you Bastet. It eventually grew on me! π
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April 2nd, 2016 at 6:40 am
Oh my…I just realized an autocorrect typo in my initial comment. I rarely “hate” anything Bastet! What I meant to say was “I’m getting the hang of it!” π
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April 1st, 2016 at 5:56 pm
[…] you Kat Myrman for introducing me to this form. I knew I had to try it the secondΒ I saw […]
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April 1st, 2016 at 9:01 pm
The way you wrote this piece inspired me to try my first Cleave Poem. I love this, Kat and thank you again for introducing me to the form βΊοΈ
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April 1st, 2016 at 9:16 pm
Thank you Annie! π
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April 1st, 2016 at 10:08 pm
You are most welcome, Kat! βΊοΈ
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April 2nd, 2016 at 3:56 am
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April 5th, 2016 at 3:49 am
[…] Gone β a Cleave Poem | like mercury colliding… […]
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April 5th, 2016 at 6:29 am
Beautiful art too. (K)
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April 5th, 2016 at 1:46 pm
Thank you. π
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April 5th, 2016 at 11:18 am
Lovely Kat, romantic. I am still trying to come up with a subject matter for my second one. π I need to just sit down and do it:)
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April 5th, 2016 at 1:48 pm
Thank you! Sometimes I need to go through photos or paintings to be inspired. May the Muse be with you! π
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