Photo Prompt: ©Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
“Mom?…Mom…”
“Oh my God! Julie, is that you?…John…wake up! It’s Julie!!! Are you alright? Where are you? …Julie?”
“Momma, I think I’m okay…I don’t know. I don’t know how I got here. All I remember is being at the party. The sign outside says Wright’s Motel. Do you know where that is?”
“Oh Julie! That’s 50 miles from here! How in the world? Well never you mind. Daddy is getting dressed. He’s on his way to bring you home.”
“Mommy, I’m scared.”
“Just stay on the line. We’ll talk until your daddy gets there.”
“Momma?! Someone’s coming!!!!”
“Julie?… Julie!!!! Oh GOD!”
Kat ~ October 14, 2015
(100 Words / Genre: Suspense)
Another awesome photo prompt from Rochelle Wisoff-Fields of Friday Fictioneers. If you would like to read other stories click HERE.
like mercury colliding... 
October 14th, 2015 at 11:17 am
The horror of every parent.. really chilling.. well done.
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October 14th, 2015 at 11:22 am
Thanks Bjorn!
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October 14th, 2015 at 12:44 pm
I sincerely hope that’s not the end of it. A true cliff hanger.
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October 14th, 2015 at 12:48 pm
For the purpose of this flash fiction 100 word challenge…this is the end. 🙂 I might consider extending this one. I have a few of these that need “the rest of the story”. 🙂
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October 14th, 2015 at 1:57 pm
Great tension!
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October 14th, 2015 at 2:18 pm
Thanks Caerlynn! 🙂
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October 14th, 2015 at 2:21 pm
Love it. I want to know what happened next!!!!
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October 14th, 2015 at 2:22 pm
You’re the second one who has requested that Olga. I may have to do a sequel to this one. 🙂
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October 14th, 2015 at 2:28 pm
That’s what happens when you write something so thrilling. Ha ha! How did she get in that horrible situation? Who’s coming? What’s going to happen to her?…
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October 14th, 2015 at 2:30 pm
So many questions left unanswered! 🙂
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October 14th, 2015 at 3:56 pm
Ooh, scary biscuits!
Nicely done.
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October 14th, 2015 at 4:31 pm
Haha! That made me laugh! Never heard that term before! Haha!
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October 14th, 2015 at 5:39 pm
Dear Kat,
I can’t think of anything worse for a parent. Terrifyingly well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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October 14th, 2015 at 5:51 pm
I agree Rochelle. I spent many a long night waiting up until all my chicks were home and safely tucked in.
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October 14th, 2015 at 9:02 pm
Painful and suspenseful
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October 14th, 2015 at 9:21 pm
Thanks Tracey!
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October 15th, 2015 at 4:37 am
Every parent’s worst nightmare. Great tension!
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October 15th, 2015 at 5:40 am
Thank you!
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October 15th, 2015 at 5:20 am
I really like the way you’ve constructed this: start at white hot, then turn up the heat!
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October 15th, 2015 at 5:47 am
I am enjoying the 100 word challenges. It truly forces one to be concise. Thanks for your comment!
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October 15th, 2015 at 8:03 am
Great tension building up here. Parents’ nightmare.
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October 15th, 2015 at 10:17 am
Thank you Patrick. I think I’ve watch too many movie thrillers! Haha! Or perhaps having raised four daughters is what inspired me! 😊
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October 15th, 2015 at 11:55 am
Lot of tension build up in this one Kat and a frightening ending! Great story!
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October 15th, 2015 at 1:24 pm
Thanks PJ!
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October 15th, 2015 at 7:56 pm
Fabulously done! I could feel my body tense as I read!
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October 15th, 2015 at 7:57 pm
Thank you Dale! I really do appreciate the feedback!
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October 15th, 2015 at 8:31 pm
One of the wonderful things about FF!
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October 15th, 2015 at 8:32 pm
Yes it is! 😊
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October 17th, 2015 at 6:27 pm
Excellent! Would be a great first page of a novel!
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October 17th, 2015 at 6:45 pm
Thank you! That’s a great thought! 😊
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