The Dawn by John la Farge, 1899
Saving dreamers from eternal sleep,
she rips night’s veil asunder while we sleep.The moon grows pale as slowly she descends,
to dip past the horizon while we sleep.And fiery sun glows red at cusp of day,
his passion rousing creatures while we sleep.But Dawn controls this dance of vast extremes
she summons mist to cool us while we sleep.Though utter darkness looms, our souls to keep,
we trust Dawn to protect us while we sleep.kat ~ 18 August 2016
A Ghazal for Jane Dougherty’s Weekly Poetry Challenge, prompt word: “Dawn”. You can learn more about the Ghazal at Shadow Poetry. This form is not for the faint of heart. But I do encourage you to give it a go. You’ll feel so accomplished if and when you are able to pull it off. (Hoping I managed at least a middling Ghazal my first try. This form will take some practice!)
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August 18th, 2016 at 3:11 pm
Lovely.
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August 18th, 2016 at 3:28 pm
Thank you Shandra! 🙂
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August 18th, 2016 at 5:11 pm
So utterly astounding. And for your first attempt, marvelous!
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August 18th, 2016 at 5:51 pm
Thanks Dorna! I worked for this one! 😊
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August 18th, 2016 at 5:28 pm
Never heard of this kind of poem before. Lovely though! Well done!
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August 18th, 2016 at 5:50 pm
Thank you! It’s a bit tricky. 😉
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August 18th, 2016 at 7:29 pm
I think you’ve done a great job!
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August 18th, 2016 at 7:38 pm
Thank you again. ❤️
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August 20th, 2016 at 5:35 pm
Well I liked the style so much that I tried it myself… and got nowhere! Not easy at all! I’ll keep trying ….
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August 20th, 2016 at 5:39 pm
Please do Kirst! This is not an easy form to crack. It took me two days to work it out. Several scrubs, tweaks and retweaks later I finally had a poem! 😜
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August 23rd, 2016 at 6:03 am
I must have missed this one, though I’m sure I read a ghazal of yours this week!
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August 23rd, 2016 at 6:15 am
I don’t know how you keep up with it all! 🙂
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August 23rd, 2016 at 9:23 am
If I get all the notifications I’m more or less okay. It’s when WP doesn’t send them or the pingbacks don’t work that it gets difficult.
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September 4th, 2016 at 5:15 pm
Well…found another lost reply. Hope you’re having a lovely weekend Jane! 😊
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August 23rd, 2016 at 6:13 am
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August 23rd, 2016 at 6:29 am
This is great! I know you put some work into it, but you’ve made it look effortless.
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August 23rd, 2016 at 9:36 am
Thank you Sarah. It was a tough form to crack, and as Jane mentioned, I was one of the rule breakers by not inserting my name in the last stanza. 🙂 I don’t particularly like doing that. Hafiz is the master and brilliant at it. 🙂
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August 23rd, 2016 at 10:04 am
You could do it in quite a subtle way with Kat/cat. I might give it a go if Jane puts one out there again…
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August 23rd, 2016 at 10:12 am
After reading others I thought of that too. Next time! 😊
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August 23rd, 2016 at 7:02 am
I love the “dance of vast extremes”. (K)
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August 23rd, 2016 at 9:37 am
Thank you! I have my moments 🙂
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August 23rd, 2016 at 7:31 am
Lovely images and message. 🙂
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August 23rd, 2016 at 9:40 am
Thank you Merril.
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