Hannah looked into Henry’s eyes. Those eyes that had been fierce with rage just days ago no longer hinted of malice or anger. They were playful, tender even, with an intensity that seared Hannah to her core. Her racing heart sent a rush of heat through her veins flushing her neck and face.
“Uh, well, uh, I believe, Mr. Chambers, that we were about to have dinner,” Hannah stumbled over her words, looking away, “though I am afraid dinner has gotten cold by now.”
Taking her cue, Henry sighed, “Well, cold or not, I’m famished as I am sure you are. Shall we?” He stepped back bowing slightly, arm extended toward the house. “After you.”
Hannah rushed past Henry hoping he would not notice that she was blushing.
He watched her pass, gazing at her perfect figure, revealed all the more by her clinging wet tea dress. “Oh and one more thing Hannah,” he called to her, “it’s Henry. None of this Mr. Chambers business, especially after tonight. I don’t know what I would have done if you hadn’t been here to help.”
By the time Henry arrived in the dining room, Hannah was busy plating dinner, the room aglow in candlelight, hazy from remnants of smoke. He leaned on the chair taking it all in; her graceful movements as she dipped a serving spoon into each bowl depositing perfect portions on his plate. “How could I have been such a beast to this lovely young woman?” He winced at the thought.
Hannah noticed his souring facial expression. “Oh! I’m sorry! Too much? Not enough?”
“No Hannah it’s perfect. Really. I was just thinking. How can you be so kind to me? I can’t imagine what you must be thinking after all that I’ve put you through. I’ve been so horrible. Can you ever forgive me?”
“Oh. Well, what I am thinking, after spending the day in this beautiful house, admiring the lovely things here, the care and attention to detail, the undeniable woman’s touch, the photographs…all I’m thinking, sir,” she stopped for a moment, looking directly into his eyes, “is that you must have loved her very much.”
Tears welled in Henry’s eyes as he leaned against the back of the chair propped only by Hannah’s tender gaze.
Hannah put the spoon down and walked behind Henry gently guiding him into the chair. “Here you go. You said you were famished. And I didn’t spend all afternoon in that kitchen to feed the compost heap. So…let’s have dinner, shall we?”
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Read previous installments of Seasoning HERE. This series is inspired by the lovely paintings that are part of Jane Dougherty’s Microfiction Challenge. This chapter is a bit late to the party, which only means I will be adding a new installment in a day or two. Thank you to everyone who is following this little story. ❤️
October 12th, 2016 at 3:33 am
Delicate writing, adding the details like tiny brush strokes to make a vivid picture. Technical nit—watch out for head-hopping. Either in Hannah’s or Henry’s thoughts, not both at the same time. I wondered too whether Hannah would use Henry’s name quite so much. When there’s no one else in the conversation we tend not to keep using the other person’s name. She might have found it difficult at first too and may have avoided it intentionally.
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October 12th, 2016 at 6:09 am
Thank you Jane. I may tweak it a bit. I am such a novice when it comes to form and flow. Your critiques are invaluable to me.😊
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October 12th, 2016 at 6:18 am
I’ve had that POV thing drummed into me by several editors and I still don’t always see it in my own stuff 🙂
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October 12th, 2016 at 4:32 pm
In considering this, does one devote separate chapters to different characters to remedy the POV thing? I am thinking that I could edit this chapter to reflect Henry’s POV entirely and it would work. 🙂
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October 12th, 2016 at 4:39 pm
It doesn’t have to be a whole chapter. You can change POV in the course of a chapter as long as the you keep whole sections of the same POV. It’s true that when you’re in the thoughts of one character and in the next sentence in the thoughts of another it reads oddly. We’re told it’s confusing, but I think it’s more off-putting than confusing, as if the reader shouldn’t be privy to everybody’s secrets in the same scene.
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October 12th, 2016 at 4:58 pm
Thank you for the clarification. That is an easier fix. 😊
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October 12th, 2016 at 5:08 pm
It’s always easier to see it in other people’s writing. I suppose it’s because the writer is in all of the characters’ heads anyway, so it doesn’t feel odd to actually write those thoughts down.
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October 12th, 2016 at 5:39 pm
I see what you’re saying. Thank you much for taking the time to help me. 😊
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October 13th, 2016 at 3:10 am
My pleasure, Kat. It helps me work things out too 🙂
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October 12th, 2016 at 4:07 pm
Fabulous! 🌹
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October 12th, 2016 at 5:32 pm
It’s about time Henry came around!!
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October 12th, 2016 at 5:39 pm
Yep
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October 12th, 2016 at 5:47 pm
Aw I love this Kat. You write the best serials. I like how the fire caused Henry to take another look at Hannah. To actually see her. And Hannah is perceptive, noticing the woman’s touch still lingering in Henry’s home, and the part of him that hasn’t quite healed. But I think she is very much helping with that as Henry questions how he first treated Hannah gruffly. Great write!
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October 12th, 2016 at 10:36 pm
Thanks Mandi. I love this story! ❤️
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October 13th, 2016 at 6:28 am
[…] Seasoning – Part 13 | like mercury colliding… […]
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October 13th, 2016 at 7:09 am
Awwwww. The romance is beginning, but I suspect there may be some obstacles yet to come. I love this story!
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October 24th, 2016 at 4:15 pm
another spameroo find…sorry I didn’t catch it sooner. I really do like to respond quicker to people who comment. Yes…we are moving forward with the romance. It was bound to happen! 🙂
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October 24th, 2016 at 4:18 pm
Yes, it was. 😉
Thanks for rescuing my comments.
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